07-12-2014, 01:40 AM
Hey Vil... one of those days where I gotta go and make some extra work for you :p
Shindroid in general: Lots of weaknesses added I see... I get that you're trying to offset the benefits of being a Construct but it feels a little overdone.
Right off the top, a race with an innate vulnerability to an energy type is pretty freaking big. Given what they get and what they don't I really think this could be dropped... especially since they have a racial feat that allows them to coat their attack in Electricity (Shocking Fist)
Construct Lock's save DC is con-based... was this an oversight as Shindroid's have no constitution or was it just meant to be (10+1/2 level)?
It also mentions Action Points as a special rule, was this meant to be PF's Hero Points or implementing Action Points in some fashion?
Extra MP's wording is still kind of off, I know I asked you about it before but best to remove the 'casting stat is treated as four higher' part since it contradicts the +1 MP/level (which was the intended bonus).
Focusing Blow: Nothing actually wrong with it, I just thought Nonlethal damage should apply for it since it's like a friend socking you in the jaw and knocking you out of something. Just a personal opinion on it.
Improved Resiliency: Shindroid doesn't mention being affected by Nonlethal damage to begin with so this feat isn't really necessary- and the penalties it gives make it so only Mending and Repair skill can heal you. Feats don't usually have downsides... just pointing that out.
Armored Hide(Bangaa) and Ironhide(Dwarf/Galka) can probably just be compiled into one feat, yes?
Monkey Wrench: Says you can use it after failing, but only before the results are revealed by the GM. Is this just in the case of you failing, but before finding out if it was a critical fail or something? Wording seemed off.
Reach Spell: Nothing wrong, just wanted to thank you personally for this one
Reverse-Feint: I see what it's supposed to do... it just feels pointless. Giving up your Full-Attack(uses a move action) to make yourself easier for one foe to hit, to get a single attack in return (+2 bonus isn't bad, but still). I just don't see the point of it myself, there were feats that did something like this better in DnD (Robilar's Gambit, iirc)
Ronso Discipline: "While you are within 30 feet of at least two other hobgoblins..." :p
Tangle Feet: Burmecian are not small size or smaller and should not be- Would need a special note for them or they should be removed as a racial prerequisite.
Throwdown Trip: Nothing wrong with it, but in prerequisites it lists "Tripping Bite (below)". It's just weird since no other feats bother pointing that out. Not a problem, just stood out.
Trailblazing Burst/Liberation Burst: Just a thought, but since Freedom of Movements is a very powerful spell effect and an advancement of ignoring terrain, maybe Trailblazing Burst could be a prerequisite of Liberation Burst? Not necessary, but given Freedom of Movement isn't a spell ffd20 casters can normally make use of... just a thought.
Shindroid in general: Lots of weaknesses added I see... I get that you're trying to offset the benefits of being a Construct but it feels a little overdone.
Right off the top, a race with an innate vulnerability to an energy type is pretty freaking big. Given what they get and what they don't I really think this could be dropped... especially since they have a racial feat that allows them to coat their attack in Electricity (Shocking Fist)
Construct Lock's save DC is con-based... was this an oversight as Shindroid's have no constitution or was it just meant to be (10+1/2 level)?
It also mentions Action Points as a special rule, was this meant to be PF's Hero Points or implementing Action Points in some fashion?
Extra MP's wording is still kind of off, I know I asked you about it before but best to remove the 'casting stat is treated as four higher' part since it contradicts the +1 MP/level (which was the intended bonus).
Focusing Blow: Nothing actually wrong with it, I just thought Nonlethal damage should apply for it since it's like a friend socking you in the jaw and knocking you out of something. Just a personal opinion on it.
Improved Resiliency: Shindroid doesn't mention being affected by Nonlethal damage to begin with so this feat isn't really necessary- and the penalties it gives make it so only Mending and Repair skill can heal you. Feats don't usually have downsides... just pointing that out.
Armored Hide(Bangaa) and Ironhide(Dwarf/Galka) can probably just be compiled into one feat, yes?
Monkey Wrench: Says you can use it after failing, but only before the results are revealed by the GM. Is this just in the case of you failing, but before finding out if it was a critical fail or something? Wording seemed off.
Reach Spell: Nothing wrong, just wanted to thank you personally for this one
Reverse-Feint: I see what it's supposed to do... it just feels pointless. Giving up your Full-Attack(uses a move action) to make yourself easier for one foe to hit, to get a single attack in return (+2 bonus isn't bad, but still). I just don't see the point of it myself, there were feats that did something like this better in DnD (Robilar's Gambit, iirc)
Ronso Discipline: "While you are within 30 feet of at least two other hobgoblins..." :p
Tangle Feet: Burmecian are not small size or smaller and should not be- Would need a special note for them or they should be removed as a racial prerequisite.
Throwdown Trip: Nothing wrong with it, but in prerequisites it lists "Tripping Bite (below)". It's just weird since no other feats bother pointing that out. Not a problem, just stood out.
Trailblazing Burst/Liberation Burst: Just a thought, but since Freedom of Movements is a very powerful spell effect and an advancement of ignoring terrain, maybe Trailblazing Burst could be a prerequisite of Liberation Burst? Not necessary, but given Freedom of Movement isn't a spell ffd20 casters can normally make use of... just a thought.